Oxygen
Love,LiveCry
no more
running water
unfixed mirror
Wake,Stand
never weak again
Cracked floor
broken man
Walk,run
against the wall
blowing wind
unending fall
rise,fly
beyond the skies
infinite fantasy
deadly dice
crouch,hide
behind the mask
hidden tears
poison flask
Cry,Die
Stumble down
broken reality
tarnished crown
9 comments:
thanks julzz.(shattered angel),
thanks for the visit ~_^
your such a good person., even though we dont talk much, but i see you have lots talent.
Kumusta and SWORD?
hahaha.ikaw ang madaming hidden talent!ang sword?baka gusto mo sali debate.sali ka.ako bahala sayo.:Dsige na.
Wow,! this poem is nice julz.
a unique form that speaks of emotive thoughts...
in each line, there is the leveling.
first line - Hopefull, optimistic
Second line - has conflict
third line - pessimistic, falling
fourth line - misery
i like it much.... never seen such form.
Take care., i read you often.
nyahaah.got inspired sa poem mo.:D i like leveling my poems.
hindi pa ako maxado oriented sa debate julz, the do's and dont's , the basics... pero cge lang ill give it a try., ~_^ im interested.. paano ba sumali.?
heheh., hindi naman, lahat naman tayo may kanya kanyang unique talent eh.
nice...., para kasing nagabuo ka ng imagery pag may leveling... maganda..
at oxygen pa ang title, something with beauty kasi oxygen is such a common thing.., the poem is painting the things that a common people suffer..., Very nice....
haha.xur.ako bahala sayo.madali lang ang debate.im xur kaya mo yan.:D
lam mo bakit oxygen?I used the word Oxygen kasi its the most ironic element ever.
Oxygen is the very source of life for human beings right?but guess what? The reason the human body breaks down and decay is because oxygen has this decaying element.so the more you inhale...the more you die.weird noh?
ahhhh,,,, got it... very weird nga,.
wide ang imaginations mo julz....
Thanks sa encouragement, ill try..
???err...sino ka anonymous poster?
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